Writers Jam

Bus Ride

by Anonymous
50
1 month ago
Two Stories

The city drifts away in the distance.
Raindrops slowly makes its way on the window.
The slow hum of the engine feels gentle.
The one beside me sits still and quiet.
My hands rests loosely on my lap.
My mind calm, by the bus's rhythm.
The stop comes, and I step off without a cover.
The rain greets me like it remembers me.


I step into the rain, let it cover my tears,
The stop appears, and makes my chest strangle.
My thoughts heavy, flooding all at once.
My fists clenched around my clothing.
The one beside me feels like a shadow that stares.
The sound of engine drills through my head.
Rain strikes the glass like piercing bullets.
The city blurs into a fog I can't remember.


Side note: Honestly i wasn't motivated to write today especially because of the difficulty of the theme for me but to keep up with the consistency i brainstormed some ideas at the end of the day and sat down to write it but it end up taking me too long. There was other prompt I was going to write next and if i could… I would try to post it tomorrow. Have a good night/day! P.s. it's different from how I write so I hope you enjoyed or liked?
(Also thank you shan for the tutorial it helped alot)

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Anonymous
> **_@Anonymous_** wrote: > this post is gonna be a hit with the pluviophiles (me) > also i liked the way u structured this w the second scene being a mirror image of the first. > looking forward to your next one :] There's other poem of mine about a photograph...
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Anonymous
> **_@adhi_** wrote: > Hey, I really liked this poem! Loved how you made the same environment feel so relaxing in the first part but so hostile in the next! My only criticism is that it could be longer, I want to read more! Thank youu. I struggled with the theme that's why I kept it short but you can read my other poem in the same theme.
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Anonymous
this post is gonna be a hit with the pluviophiles (me) also i liked the way u structured this w the second scene being a mirror image of the first. looking forward to your next one :]
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adhi
Hey, I really liked this poem! Loved how you made the same environment feel so relaxing in the first part but so hostile in the next! My only criticism is that it could be longer, I want to read more!
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